Thursday, December 20, 2012

Abandoned

Today was the Thursday meeting at O'Connors. The topic of the day was Composition. It was great to talk about the successful (and less than successful) aspects of the work we brought in. I brought this, something I painted plein air last summer. It's a bunch of people who were (of all things)...singing in the South Park Blocks. There is plenty to like about it...I have kind of a thing for strong contrast and silhouettes, but I abandoned this effort midstream because it just didn't make complete sense and the heightened contrast looked more nightclubby than Park-Blocksy. I'll probably remember what I do like about it and make use of those things in another painting another time. Meanwhile, I think it's a pretty good example of ..."poor composition".

To see all the paintings that everyone brought....go HERE.

Celeste Bergin, Singers (incomplete), oil on 8x8 canvas panel

13 comments:

Sheryl Anthony said...

Can you tell me what you think the painting needs? Am I wrong to kind of like this?

CrimsonLeaves said...

I don't "kind of like" this. I LOVE it! Quite honestly, it never occurred to me that this was a night club and I immediately got the sense it was outside, some sort of party, maybe a bonfire in the distance somewhere. I like paintings that aren't every day run of the mill subjects. Even your landscapes have mood and atmosphere so your work has a fan for life.

As to the political differences, I more than expect them and I don't often talk politics either. My feelings are often gut and heart directed and sometimes the words fall out of my mouth. A syndrome particular to me, it seems. LOL Great friends can have political differences, no?

L.W.Roth, said...

This painting is the best I've seen of your work. Yes, the composition is spectacular as is your palette. Fantastic. A great painting to flaunt. You're a hell of a painter Celeste.

Julie Ford Oliver said...

Well, Celeste...you put me back on my heels. I agree with Sheryl. I want to know that too. I happen to think you have a great eye flow going on here. Starting with the main strong silhouette you lead the eye down by the brilliant use of a warm arrow area to the standing figure in the shadow linked next to the seated person by the subtle reflected warm glow on the gentle, curved line.
The left corner block leads my eye up again to the area of interest with lovely areas of warm confetti against the cool. So please explain what is so wrong as I seriously want to learn.

Celeste Bergin said...

Hmmm. thanks all, so much. I don't like that the people are in an aligned perfect row (but that is how they were). Like I wrote, I like a lot about it, it has zeal, but I couldn't manage to make the people more varied in scale and size and I thought the painting was/is confusing. It doesn't say singers, it doesn't say Park blocks. But, thanks for liking it, all the same! Appreciate your comments, as always!

Celeste Bergin said...

PS. LW...this is "the best"? Hmmmm again!

martinealison said...

Une peinture qui sent bon la sérénité, le partage (malgré son titre!), l'espoir avec la lumière au fond... Une superbe composition.
Un très joli jeu d'ombre qui nous entraîne et nous mêle aux spectaculaires silhouettes...

Gros bisous à vous ma chère Céleste.

Eric Bowman said...

Composition is also effected by scale. The thumbnail scale of this piece caught my eye as did the figures; they are slightly staggered at an angle much like the Hollywood sign is in Southern California which creates it's own flow... Overall, to me, it works fine compositionally as a comprehensive sketch, though it could use some minor tweaks when transferring it to it's next incarnation. We are always (and should be) our own worst critic, but that doesn't mean we get the final say on whether a work of ours is successful or not in the eyes of others...so ease up on yourself, Celeste -- this one's working fine.

Celeste Bergin said...

Martine wrote:

A painting that smells of serenity, sharing (despite its title!), With the hope of light at the bottom ... A superb composition.
A beautiful shadow play that draws us mingle with spectacular silhouettes ...

Big kisses to you my dear Celeste.

(thanks, Martine!)

Celeste Bergin said...

Thanks, Sheryl, Sherry, Linda, Julie, Martine and Eric! I appreciate your comments. This is what is pretty great about knowing other artists and getting feedback. I guess, in retrospect, I could have chosen a better example of poor composition from my stacks of other abandoned paintings...but it took you all to convince me. I'm looking at it with a fresh eye..Thanks to you!

Stephanie Berry said...

I really like this. I don't always get whether a painting has good or bad composition but I know this works for me!

Quin Sweetman said...

Ha! Have to say I agree with most of what everyone else has said. Sometimes a painting is successful, even if it isn't what you were intending to portray. Happy accidents can be marvelous, like this one!

David Starr said...

??? this is a bad painting ??? NO